She drops the vase,
The porcelain erupts.
Her heart quickens its beat,
As shards of lilac
Splash the wood beneath her feet.
Flushing, cheeks aflame,
She stoops to hide the wreckage,
Stoops to clear the mess,
Scoops the jagged pieces,
Dripping blood upon her dress.
Unexpected anger,
Explodes from moistened lips.
Pausing, deep inhale,
She holds her thumb between her teeth,
Pulsing, throbbing, feeling pale.
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Favorite line is ‘dripping blood upon her dress’.
That’s exactly my favorite line as well
I am glad you guys enjoyed it. For some reason I feel that this poem is missing something… I almost didn’t post it.
It does have a sort of unfinished feel to it – as if it ends too abruptly. I’m not sure what else it needs though.
It’s still a fabulous poem.
My favourite lines are ‘As shards of lilac
Splash the wood beneath her feet.’.
It’s an amazing poem, full of feeling.
I like these two lines as well. The first two stanzas make me happy, but I am not so sure about the third one. I feel like it ends on a weak note.
This is great. I love that the subject is so relatable and yet the chaotic scene is somehow beautiful
The only thing this Poem is missing is an award! Love your Poems, I am rather new to your blog but the ones i have read are always sensational. ~Shane
Thank you so much. My blog itself is pretty new. I’m glad that it is having an effect on you. I promise there will be many more poems to come.
My Blog is also new,and I lack a steady stream of content as well,But don’t worry we will get there in time!
good poem
That’s always the conundrum isn’t it? When should it be finished? Like a painter of the romantic era brown washing his works into ruin. Your poem evokes thought just as it is. And it only truly lacks if there is part of the story you still need to tell. Perhaps there will be a part II? Far be it for us, though tempting, to fill in some extra lines.
It’s a very lovely poem!
I think there will be a part II to this one eventually.
lovely